姓氏：刁

Volunteer work: an unique lesson

　　刁文卿

　　辽宁省大连市第十二中学高二9班

　　With the rapid development of techndogy(technology) and communication in our society, the sense of competitiveness and cooperation filled our mind steadily. At the same time, the owarness(awareness) of helping others in people's mind also became stronger and stronger. This situation led to the start of a new “job”—volunteer。

　　We just found from the passage that the increasing number of the vdunteer(volunteer) touched all the people home and abroad. And I argue the point that volunteer work plays an integral part in our daily life especially for the youth in China。

　　First and foremest(foremost)， nowadays, parents can only have one child and he or she may be given the best care of the other members in the family. As a consequence, the only clild(child) may become selfish and self-centered unconciously(unconsciously)。

　　The volunteer work, as a special lessons can help the youngster put the other people's feeling before theirs and ask for their opinion before taking actions. Second volunreer(volunteer) work is not only a training of do others a favour but a process of improving your cooperation ability as well。

　　Last but not least, volunteer work is an unique lesson that we cant(cannot) get in our school. Former leader Jiangzemin said: the main goal in education is making students more creative and helping them reach their full potential. And in my poirt(point) view, it is volunteer work which can help them reach their full potential but not our school lessons. This kind of pratical practise can make us know more about what is going on in our society and in the world, for instance, the May 12 earthquake in wenchuan and the wonderful 2008 Beijing Olympic Game and so on。

　　All the evidence discussed in the above awalysis the points to my conclusion that volunteer work is an unique lesson for our teenagers as it make us know more. do more and think more. And I believe that the accumulation of volunteer will rising rapily and it will lead our country to a brighter future。

　　专家建议：

　　写完作文后，自己通读一遍，这样会减少些不必要的拼写和语法错误，建议多学过的词组造句，这样表达会更丰富，也可以多看些优秀范文。

　　专家点评：

　　文章表达清楚，语言较好，但结构有些不清晰，第二点在文章中没有展开说。时态用的有些混乱。总体不错。

　　Volunteer Life

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